Inspired by Ernesto (imitation is the sincerest form of flattery), I thought I'd try my hand at a hay(no)ku:
If --
we’d stayed
warm in bed --
days
had thirty
fine fat hours --
languid
might describe
these silver mornings.
Time
though places
its firm hand
in
the small
of our backs
pushes
past the
scent of coffee,
the
red interior
of ripe fruit.
Nice.
Posted by: Dave | August 31, 2005 at 10:53 AM
Wonderful!
Posted by: Marja-Leena | August 31, 2005 at 11:05 AM
Yes, very nice.
Posted by: leslee | August 31, 2005 at 12:29 PM
evocative shot and lovely poetry
Posted by: Tina | August 31, 2005 at 01:42 PM
I like this even better on second reading/viewing. There's a great motion to the piece; the form (though not the content) reminds me of a slinky going down the stairs.
Posted by: Dave | August 31, 2005 at 03:19 PM
Thanks, all!
Posted by: beth | August 31, 2005 at 03:50 PM
I concur with all of the above, though I'm still not sure what a hay(no)ku actually is.
Posted by: Kurt | August 31, 2005 at 10:51 PM
Oops. Scrolling down, I see you've already answered the question. My apologies.
Posted by: Kurt | August 31, 2005 at 10:54 PM
The photo and the poem are both really beautiful. And beauty's much needed in the face of today's news headlines. Might try my hand at hai(no)ku - Ilove the shape of it.
Posted by: Jean | September 01, 2005 at 05:45 AM
Yes, what they all said. Beautiful. And the form is tempting indeed.
Posted by: Natalie | September 01, 2005 at 07:53 AM
Then jump on in! Let's see some more of these! (People seem to play with them - they can be as short as one tercet, and they can also run backwards: 3 words, then 2, then 1.) I found it really fun to try a new form of poetry - but I am a fan of limitations in creative endeavor. Ironically, sometimes imposing limitations is what helps me get unstuck, or find a new path toward greater freedom of expression...
Posted by: beth | September 01, 2005 at 08:20 AM
Wow. It's beautiful, Beth. The first stanza is so evocative; it sets the whole piece in motion and then it evolves into unsuspected places.
Thank you!
Posted by: ernesto Priego | September 02, 2005 at 12:37 AM
*Sigh*
Delicious
Posted by: susurra | September 02, 2005 at 06:04 PM
Wondrous. Vital. Youthful and flowing with juices. Thank you! And I love the picture too.
Posted by: qB | September 02, 2005 at 06:16 PM
Thank you all, and thank you again for the inspiration, Ernesto.
Posted by: beth | September 03, 2005 at 09:22 PM